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Post by Smaug on Sept 11, 2008 10:25:10 GMT -5
Something Meaningful Word count: 299
Rating: E
Genre: Maybe other?
A/N: Thank you Saki for the wonderful title suggestionI was such an awkward child. I didn’t sit still in pretty dresses, I’d much rather escape outside and come back covered in mud. I loved plants even then, I would escape to pull up weeds and plant apple seeds in the hope that they would grow. As a teenager they would become my saviour; somewhere that I could run to where I could just be by myself. I turned rebellious, the thought makes me laugh even now, I shredded all of my pretty dresses. The dirt under my fingernails never bothered me; neither did the dirt on my clothes. I could grow things and that was far more beautiful. The first plant I ever truly owned was a gift from Filius when I was seventeen. He was a new professor that year and he had been so much better than the previous one. He had taken time aside to help me with charms and my struggles faded with understanding. Over the course of my final year we became friends. At Christmas I awoke to find a plant pot beside my bed. I often received flowers as gifts, but no one before Filius had understood that I wanted something alive that I could love and nurture. I had sent him a little gimmicky gift. It was a muggle fizz keeper; he often complained that he could not keep his cherry soda fizzy even by magical means. It’s only now I recognise that day as when I fell in love with him. His face lit up when I saw him and he thanked me graciously for my gift. Something meaningful, he had said, something that showed I listened and I cared. I felt the same, but it was only years later after he first kissed me I could admit that. Finite |
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Post by OSUSprinks on Sept 11, 2008 10:40:30 GMT -5
I love that they fell in love when she was in school. I would love to see Fil's side of this. The gifts were perfect for each other and he was right about the fact that they were meaningful. I want to know more about their story now! Well done!
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Post by pinkie on Sept 11, 2008 10:43:59 GMT -5
Okay, i have also officially turned into goo.
But i really want to comment on the style, which was incredible. It reminded me of Philippa Gregory - and that is high praise. What you have done with a flashfic is amazing!
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Post by stefdarlin on Sept 14, 2008 9:32:09 GMT -5
You are so very good at saying a lot in so little. This was lovely. And even though her gift to him was a bit gimmicky, it was still the perfect thing. Aww!
I love the look into how she feel about her plants, and it struck me how shy she seems in this without it shouting at you, I love that.
Cheers,
Stef =o)
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Post by SakiJune on Sept 14, 2008 14:51:28 GMT -5
A little suggestion for the title: Something Meaningful. I love when titles are taken from the fic itself.
It is a really good idea for the beginning of their romance. I don't know much about English writing styles, but this sounds to me different than your usual one. It is a great thing, because it is her point of view, not someone else telling the story... amazing!
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Post by OSUSprinks on Sept 14, 2008 15:09:19 GMT -5
Ooooh I like that for a title, Elo. Good call Saki!
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Post by Smaug on Sept 14, 2008 15:13:54 GMT -5
I agree! Thank you Saki, you are a genius.
I think it is quite a lot different to how I usually write.
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Post by SakiJune on Sept 14, 2008 15:16:43 GMT -5
I am moved you really used that as a title.
Such a honour, for a non-mothertongue *blushes*
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